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Hello again Christina! I am here just to say that I am obsessed with the layout you chose for your blogger website. The title at the top really captured my attention and I think it works really well for the class and even shows off you personality a bit. I also like how the blog archive is set up by month and date, so it is easy to find things based off when you wrote them!
Hi, Christina! You blog is beautiful in it's simplicity - the green on grey is a wonderful color scheme and it fits your writing. Your formatting is on point - it's nice and clean cut and there's no guess work as to what your topic is (thank you for that!). Fantastic work and I hope you have an awesome semester!
Hello, Christina. At first, I thought the title of your page was “Changing of the Seasons” but at second glance I realized It was “Changeling of the Seasons. It already made me so curious I had to google what it was. Now that I know, I think the image you chose for your cover page is really suitable. The caption you wrote for it also went really well in describing the image. I liked the image because it focuses in on the two women with the baby, I almost did not see the two fairies for it kind of blended in with the background. I find this fitting for the fairies are secretive in changing out the babies. I also really liked your tagline, I feel as though it really sets the mysterious mood as to what these creatures are. Overall I found you did a really good job on your cover page however, I was not able to find your introduction.
Christina,
My immediate response to your storybook was a feeling of calmness and peace. I am not sure if that is the feeling that you want your reader to feel but if it is, great job! That is exactly what I felt. It seems like your story will be very interesting to read as your cover page image is very intriguing. However, I think realized that there may be a dark twist to your storybook as I read the line in your cover page that says "we would all be safe". It definitely gave your page a sense of mystery. Great job on choosing your words to make a good foundation. Your cover page is great and I am excited to see where you will go with your storybook. I was also very attracted to your Introduction name "In the cave you go". That is awesome mine just says Introduction but now you have motivated me to change my Introduction title as I can see how it only adds to the suspense leading up to what I may read. I did not find an introduction on the page but I am sure that it will be great. You have a great start!
Hello Christina,
I really like the layout of your storybook. I may be biased, because blue is my favorite color! However, when looking at the first page in which you have the picture of the woman and baby I would recommend that you change the color of the title in the upper left corner. It is very close to the color of the background and I almost missed it. When I read the introduction I can honestly say it gave me a chill. It was very easy for me to think about how we can hide behind our technology and feel that we have solved so many of our problems, but what if there were beings that were not human amongst us. This introduction did a great job in making me wonder about my own neighbors, because nowadays people do not talk to their neighbors and have no idea who they are. I look forward to reading the queens tale!
First of all, I love the meme on your comment wall, I just had to make a "comment" about it! As for your storybook, I think that it is a very interesting and eery theme. I am already intrigued by it. I think you do a great job of pulling in the reader by making it so mysterious. We do not have any idea of who or what you are describing to us just yet. I think the idea of having a Queen Changeling is an awesome idea. It really makes sense, and I cannot wait to hear about her background story. I'm wondering if these creatures are evil or not. They do not sound caring, kind, and delightful from what I can tell so far. I got a kind of feeling like from the movie "I Am Legend" where the humankind gets infected with a disease so these human-like creature creep around. I think the background, set up, and font choice nicely compliment your storybook topic as well. Can't wait to see what else you have!
Hey Christina,
I chose your storybook from your title. I absolutely love the idea of a Changeling storybook! In high school a read a very creepy book called "The Stolen Child" about changelings and it was so good. I am really excited to read your storybook. I like how you are bringing this old folklore into the 21st century. The way you have written the introduction makes me want to keep reading. As for the design, I really like that too. The pictures you chose were very creepy and go well with the story. The melancholy blue color scheme is a nice touch too. I can't wait for you to write more! Great job!
Hi Kristina,
I chose your storybook because mine also contains changelings and I wanted to get another perspective on them. I was very surprised to see that you took the voice of one of the Fae and I think this will make for some very interesting stories. I think it could be interesting to explore the motivations of the fairy folk for stealing human children and replacing them with changelings.
I never really thought of the possibility of a Queen Changeling and I wonder how many times she has passes herself off as a mortal. I think your title is clever but I wonder if you are going to tie in into your storyline at all. Is the expansion and contraction of changeling time dependent on the seasons?
I like the color scheme you chose for your storybook. It reminds me of a cool, dark, and water-filled cave. It also complements the images you chose nicely. I would have to agree with one of the above commenters that the color of your title text is too close to the background color.
I can’t wait to see what direction you take this in and look forward to reading your stories soon!
Hi Christina,
I think your idea is for your project is so interesting. This is a genre that is not very popular with most people. But now through your stories we can learn more. My first thought was about that movie with Angelina Jolie, which is also called the Changeling. Which was an interesting movie. Your introduction was rather spooky in my opinion. But I think that was really cool. Also that it will take your story in an intriguing direction.
Woah I like. Sensing a little dark side in you lol most of my stories are gory (about warriors, less fantasy) but this intrigues me. Changelings are already pretty creepy to think about, having things that look, sound, and behave like us but with an ulterior motive to kill us, pretty intense. Reminds me of movies called Mimic and of other creepy movies where I have seen this kind of behavior. Or like paranormal stuff, peoples bodies being possessed and taken over (I love the paranormal activity movie series). I think your pictures inform your writing very well. I paired them perfectly, and the quotes about not knowing the difference was a nice touch. I'll check back on this for sure. Interesting stuff. Start to dive into it!
As far as some things to think about: what does medicine exactly have to do with it? Maybe explain that a bit more? And what do seasons have to do with anything (i'm assuming more about that will be added on later though). But good job
Hey Christina! Wow your introduction gives me sense of mystery and paranormal activity. I am guessing these changelings are spirits that possess people or they might even be demons. These kinds of things are really interesting to me because I do believe there are other beings such as angels and demons around us. So I am very excited to see what the changelings are. Whether they are good or bad I would like to know what it is that they intend by living amongst humans and possessing them.
Your introduction seemed grammatically correct to me so I won’t comment on that. I overall really like where you are going with the storybook because out of the introduction you can a lot of interesting stories out of it. Lastly I am also very interesting in learning about the Queen changeling and how she was made or if she will die at some point? Either way you did an excellent job! Keep up the good work!
Great job on your Storybook! The pictures you utilized on each page are really good choices. They helped set up the story and gave the reader a chance to really envision these creatures. The colors and fonts you chose worked well with one another and made it easy to read. Many times whe I am looking at other people’s work I have a hard time reading their work simply because of the appearance!
This Storybook has so much potential. I think it is really interesting how you are telling this from the point of view of the Queen. It must have been difficult coming up with a creation story on your own. You did a really nice job! If it weren’t for your Author’s Note I wouldn’t have even guessed that you made it up yourself. Overall, great job! I can’t wait to see the stories you tell as the semester continues!
Hi Christina!
I love your introduction. It has a very ominous feel to it and a very strong narrator. One think that I would maybe suggest is putting your story in a more exotic font especially since the Queen Changeling is talking about how long they have been with humans. That’s why I use ‘Georgia’ font in my stories, I just really feel like it adds an ancient feel to it. I have heard of Changelings before but I wasn’t aware that the reason they stole humans was to survive on their souls. I feel like this is really unique and makes perfect sense for your story especially because in your story the Changelings are trying to take over the world. I hope in your future stories you can talk about the things humans have done to prevent Changelings from stealing humans. That would be really interesting to me!! But great job and I look forward to reading more.
Hey Christina,
I read the story in your storybook called ‘In the Cave You Go’. This was such an interesting read and it really grabbed my attention. From the very beginning, I was pulled in because the first couple paragraphs had you wondering what these things were that the author was talking about. At first I was convinced it was a virus or something along those lines, then I kept reading and figured out that that was not the case.
I loved your word choice because you created a tone of intelligence and sophistication. This also sounded like it could be futuristic, too. Every paragraph flowed really well into the next paragraph and there were no grammatical errors that I could find. I like the fact that the story is told from the changelings themselves because I felt like the we were inside the head and could really understand what they were thinking and their life background.
Hi Christina! I really like how you are tying in the seasons to your story. This is an awesome device that works well with your storybook title.
I also like how the rambling and mysterious prose reflects the voice of your character. It makes sense that the mysterious and ancient Changeling Queen would have a unique way of speaking, although sometimes it’s confusing. What does she mean in the second line when she says, “but I was”?
I really like how the Queen communicates with the creator through the winds. You created a lot of beautiful imagery with that and the forest details.
I wish the list were described from the Changelings point of view. It seems a bit backwards for the Queen to tell it from a human’s point of view. For instance, “The Creator has taught me laws we must abide by, some of which the humans have discovered. The first law is that we must not take a child lying beside a key. It is also forbidden…” or something like that.
I’m looking forward to reading about Eldest and finding out who the changeling Creator really is! Keep up the good work.
Hi Christina!
Wow! I cannot believe I have never been to your storybook until now!
First off, I love your theme. Tying in each season is so creative. I would have never thought of something like that.
Second, I could go on and on about your layout and formatting. It is perfect! It is so simple and easy. I love being able to navigate and read a storybook without any hesitation. That is exactly how I feel about your storybook. I love the large font as well. I hate struggling to read the stories. Yours are wonderful!
I absolutely love your writing style as well. It has a very formal tone, but it is still easy to follow.
I did not see any major grammar issues or spelling mistakes as I read your stories. Good job and keep up the good work! I look forward to seeing your final project at the end of the class!
Hi Christina! I love how unique your storybook idea is! This is my first time reading your work, and I like everything that I have seen thus far!
With In The Cave You Go, I like how you gave your introduction its own title. In the last paragraph of your introduction, you were able to answer all of the questions that I had in the back of my head, so that was good!
With Spring, I like ho you clued us in to tipping off the reader as to who the Creator is. Hopefully, your next story will be titled Summer to keep the seasons theme throughout your storybook.
I also like the layout you chose for your storybook. Although simple, it does not detract the attention of the reader from your tales. So good job, and I cannot wait to read more!
Hi Christina,
I came back to see how your project was going! I am very happy that I did choose to come back. Your first story Spring was very good and entertaining. I found it to be very mysterious at times as well. I enjoyed that. You have done a great job in letting us know a low about what in going on, enough to keep us intrigued but still not giving us all the information. For example, the creator and who he/she is. I think it is very important to have something like that in writing so the reader may have an answer that they are looking for when reading. You have done great on your project and I think that your images are also working great with your writing. Lastly, the seasons theme that you have going on is very unique and interesting. I am curious to see which season you will choose next. I love the fall so maybe it is that or you may be going in order and choose summer next. Either way I am sure you will have a great story.
Hey Christina! I wasn't sure where to put this comment so I just wandered to your comment wall. I wanted to thank you for your comment about my rough semester. I should've gotten back to you sooner but I really wanted to sincerely thank you. That comment helped to cheer me up when I was really sick and down. I really appreciate it and the fact that you took the time out to comment that for me. Thank you!
Hi Christina, I'm back! I returned to read your 'Summer' chapter in your storybook. I think that you did a good job with having this tale be from the changeling's perspective versus a third person point of view. I read the original tale in the Celtic Unit, so I knew what you were going to do with the story.
My main thing with this tale is that I know that they are all to take direction from the Creator and listen to its directions blindly. But I wish you knew as a reader as to why changelings were purposed to take on the form of humans.
Then, I like at the end how you indicate Guard fixes things and that you will fill us in about his job. Nice job with the foreshadowing.
Although this tale seemed shorter than your other ones, you still did a good job with it!
Hi Christina,
You were one of the first storybooks I read at the beginning of the semester and I just wanted to come back and see how much it was progressing. I felt your introduction set a strong tone to your story. You perceived the narrator as a confident queen that is proud of her kind while setting an edge of mystery. She sounds rather scary actually, and I would never want to go in the cave. I was so intrigued by your story, I had to read about spring. I like that you gave the narrator a connection with her creator through wind. I also liked that you started your story off with a back track to how and why the changelings disliked humans and had to feed on their souls. I thought it was interesting that the changeling told the reader of ways to protect their babies from being switched. Maybe she has some humanity in her after all? Thank you for the great read!
Hi Christina! This is my first time in your storybook. I like your layout and the colors of the site. The coverpage looks really interesting. I feel like that instantly hooks the reader in. The sentence in the bottom looks very interesting and intriguing.
The introduction is very beautifully written. I felt like it provided a very nice start to the storybook. It was filled with great details, Those details made the story very intriguing and kept the readers wanting more.
The seasons theme is really nice to read as I miss spring and summer already and we are not really into winter yet. Good job on describing who the main character is. The protections list makes it seem really realistic, and that is great. I like how it leads into your second story. They flow really well together. And I didn't find any errors with either one. So great job on that.
Hi Christina. I chose you for one of my appreciation posts because you have given me a lot of great feedback. And feedback is GOLD. Thank you for taking the time to leave detailed comments.
I've also really enjoyed reading your storybook. I haven't been able to read Summer, yet, but I just checked out the page and your image choice is gorgeous. Keep up the good work and I look forward to finding out how the story ends.
Nice storybook. I like the background and font color. It fits together and is simple. It doesn’t take away from the story or distracts the reader. I like the first person perspective. It adds a lot of detail of what’s happening so we get a better look on what’s happening. it feels like someone is talking to me and it makes me want to read the other stories now just because of how you lead up to the stories ahead.
You spaced out your paragraphs nicely so it was easier to read. I didn’t see grammatical errors or confusing parts, so you did a good job at editing. The picture was nice too. Overall, I like this intro and I look forward to reading the rest of the stories.
Hi Christina! I feel as if you may be annoyed with me at this point for commenting on your work so much. But I just wanted to pop by and let you know that you are a great writer. You are funny, honest, and driven. Your work is really good, and you seem to be a genuinely good person! I decided to write an appreciation post for you because you deserve it. I hope the last month of your semester goes well as you wrap up your time at OU, and it was good to get to meet you! You work so hard, and it shines through in what you do. Good luck with the rest of your endeavors!
Hey, Christina!
I really liked your quote in the beginning of your storybook. "If knowing the difference between a child and a changeling were easy, we would all be safe." It set the tone for the entire thing!
I also like the simplicity of your website layout. Instead of bringing attention to things other than your tale, it brings the reader's attention to the words you have written and the images you have chosen, which really made my interest pique and my attention stay to the stories you told. But of course, that wasn't too difficult because of how well written they are!
The image you picked for summer was gorgeous. And you did pick the perfect story to base your own off of! It fit well.
Your author's notes were great insights into your thinking behind your stories, which I appreciated.
Overall, wonderful storybook. I really enjoyed reading it! Good job and have a great rest of your year.
Hello! I am actually in the Indian Epics class, but since this week we are given the opportunity to comment on other works, I decided to read through your storybook. It was really interesting to see how the different classes have their own styles of writing, based on what we have all been reading and I definitely enjoyed reading through your storybook. Firstly, I was really intrigued by the title of your Storybook. I’m a sucker for puns and word play, and I’ve always loved weird stories about changelings, so I decided to give your storybook a read through. Secondly, I thought that the samples of art you showed were very well chosen and fit with the overall eerie vibe of the project. I liked how you used the seasons to tie everything together. Overall, I really loved your story book. Good luck with the remainder of the semester and finals!
Hi Christina! I revisited your tale because I really wanted to know what approach you took with your 'Autumn' chapter! I think that it was good to have this tale told by Guard because he is mentioned in the previous chapters. The only thing that I would have liked to have seen with your storybook would be to have a conclusion chapter? A conclusion would be a nice finishing touch to just wrap up all the tales that you have told. Other than that, I enjoyed reading your work. Great job! Good luck with the rest of your studies!
Hi Christina! I haven’t checked in on your project since Spring, so I had a lot of catching up to do. I just bulleted my comments as a read.
Summer
• You might consider using dialogue when the changelings speak. You presented the words like the changelings were speaking but there were no quotation marks.
• This image, like all the images you chose for your storybook is beautiful.
• I thought the switch would happen earlier in the summer, not right before autumn.
• Any more specifics about how they switch places?
• How do they get the babies to Guard?
• I’ve heard about one motivation for changeling switches. The changelings enjoy being caudled and cared for by a young mother. Bathed, fed warm milk, and loved by a beautiful young woman 24 hours a day. Do your changelings enjoy the care?
Autumn
• Changelings can appear at adults? I guess they have gotten a lot better at imitating humans.
• I like how you took a tiny detail from another story, how returned humans lose their memory, and created a whole character, Guard.
Winter
• Backslash after paragraph 7.
• In Summer you said that the Wise Man was the Other in disguise but not Creator and Wise Man are brothers and the Other is the father? That confused me a little bit.
• I like the twist that you threw in about humans and changelings working together and ending the conflict. I think it might be nice to add in something like, “after living as humans for so many years, we changelings have come to love and understand you. We no longer need to fight.” I don’t know just an idea to help legitimize the Queen’s rebellion against the creator.
• So were Wise Man and Creator best friends or twins?
I think you did a great job on this project. Your story line is very original but I can tell that you made a lot of adjustments along the way. Now would be a great time to go back and verify details and add foreshadowing. Just make sure the story is cohesive throughout. I really enjoyed reading!
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